Once a man died， and God sent a spirit （妖精） to him. “Come with me，” the spirit said. The man followed him. They walked without a word till they got to a fork （貧口） in the road. Then the spirit made the man stop.
“Now， make your choice， sir，” the spirit said. “If you turn right， you will get to the heaven. Turn left， and it leads you to the hell. Choose your way！”
The man kept silence for a while. Then he asked， “What's the heaven like？”
The spirit made a clap. Two angels appeared. They carried a picture with them. On the picture there were flowers， grass， brooks and hills. Obviously， that was a peaceful picture.
The man looked at it for a minute， and then asked， “Now，what about the hell？”
The spirit clapped twice. Two ghosts appeared， carrying a picture， too. On their picture there were beauties and gold. “Now， made your choice， man，” the spirit repeated. The man turned left and walked forward.
After a while， he reached the hell. He was very surprised to see the [a] （1） terrible scene. Fire， snakes， coffins and death's heads fill [filled] （2）there. The man was frightened by that.
Just then， a ghost came up to him. “I know you'll come，” he said. The man recognized that this ghost was one of the two he saw [had seen ] （3） just now at the fork.
“That…” the man pointed to the coffins and snakes， but he couldn't finish a sentence.
“Oh， that's the hell， you now understand？” the ghost laughed.
“But just now …” the man was still puzzled.
“Oh， brother， that's our advertisement！” the ghost replied.
原無(wú)錫市青山中學(xué) 曹寅珺
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
這是一篇記敘文體的英語(yǔ)寓言，寫(xiě)得很有寓意。全文用詞較流暢，對(duì)話(huà)也設(shè)計(jì)得較好。文章中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）那人剛到地獄，眼前的情景是他從沒(méi)見(jiàn)到過(guò)的，也是上文沒(méi)交代過(guò)的，故不宜用the，用不定冠詞a較好。
（2）原文fill時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)了，可能是筆誤。練習(xí)寫(xiě)作，一定要一絲不茍，避免一切不應(yīng)犯的錯(cuò)誤。
（3）用過(guò)去完成時(shí)had seen能更好地表現(xiàn)動(dòng)作的先后關(guān)系。
“Now， make your choice， sir，” the spirit said. “If you turn right， you will get to the heaven. Turn left， and it leads you to the hell. Choose your way！”
The man kept silence for a while. Then he asked， “What's the heaven like？”
The spirit made a clap. Two angels appeared. They carried a picture with them. On the picture there were flowers， grass， brooks and hills. Obviously， that was a peaceful picture.
The man looked at it for a minute， and then asked， “Now，what about the hell？”
The spirit clapped twice. Two ghosts appeared， carrying a picture， too. On their picture there were beauties and gold. “Now， made your choice， man，” the spirit repeated. The man turned left and walked forward.
After a while， he reached the hell. He was very surprised to see the [a] （1） terrible scene. Fire， snakes， coffins and death's heads fill [filled] （2）there. The man was frightened by that.
Just then， a ghost came up to him. “I know you'll come，” he said. The man recognized that this ghost was one of the two he saw [had seen ] （3） just now at the fork.
“That…” the man pointed to the coffins and snakes， but he couldn't finish a sentence.
“Oh， that's the hell， you now understand？” the ghost laughed.
“But just now …” the man was still puzzled.
“Oh， brother， that's our advertisement！” the ghost replied.
原無(wú)錫市青山中學(xué) 曹寅珺
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
這是一篇記敘文體的英語(yǔ)寓言，寫(xiě)得很有寓意。全文用詞較流暢，對(duì)話(huà)也設(shè)計(jì)得較好。文章中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）那人剛到地獄，眼前的情景是他從沒(méi)見(jiàn)到過(guò)的，也是上文沒(méi)交代過(guò)的，故不宜用the，用不定冠詞a較好。
（2）原文fill時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)了，可能是筆誤。練習(xí)寫(xiě)作，一定要一絲不茍，避免一切不應(yīng)犯的錯(cuò)誤。
（3）用過(guò)去完成時(shí)had seen能更好地表現(xiàn)動(dòng)作的先后關(guān)系。