I had a good weekend.
On Saturday morning,I did my homework and studied .On Sauurday (Saturday)afternoon, I played
the volleyball with my friends. It was a little difficult (After that, I was a little tired.).on the night(in the evening),I watched tv(TV) and
played(played some games. play一般不單獨(dú)使用。) .
On Sunday morning,I went to the library,I read a(an) interested(interesting) book. On Sund(Sunday) afternoon(,)
I went shopping. On Sungay night(Sunday evening) , I cleaned my room.
點(diǎn)評(píng)：1、全文的時(shí)態(tài)都用過(guò)去時(shí)，很好。2、有一些拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，不夠細(xì)心。3、全文的句式比較簡(jiǎn)單單調(diào)，要想得高分，還是要多用一些不同句式。4、文章內(nèi)容不夠豐富，在周末做的這么多事情中，您可以選擇一兩件詳細(xì)描寫(xiě)，這樣就不會(huì)有記流水賬的感覺(jué)。5、但是作為小學(xué)生，能寫(xiě)出這樣已經(jīng)不錯(cuò)了，繼續(xù)加油。
On Saturday morning,I did my homework and studied .On Sauurday (Saturday)afternoon, I played
the volleyball with my friends. It was a little difficult (After that, I was a little tired.).on the night(in the evening),I watched tv(TV) and
played(played some games. play一般不單獨(dú)使用。) .
On Sunday morning,I went to the library,I read a(an) interested(interesting) book. On Sund(Sunday) afternoon(,)
I went shopping. On Sungay night(Sunday evening) , I cleaned my room.
點(diǎn)評(píng)：1、全文的時(shí)態(tài)都用過(guò)去時(shí)，很好。2、有一些拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤，不夠細(xì)心。3、全文的句式比較簡(jiǎn)單單調(diào)，要想得高分，還是要多用一些不同句式。4、文章內(nèi)容不夠豐富，在周末做的這么多事情中，您可以選擇一兩件詳細(xì)描寫(xiě)，這樣就不會(huì)有記流水賬的感覺(jué)。5、但是作為小學(xué)生，能寫(xiě)出這樣已經(jīng)不錯(cuò)了，繼續(xù)加油。